LO5: Feedback from Vicky

All the needs and expectations have been met through the script and recieved a good positive feedback from vicky about our script. However there is room for improvement on a few aspects. 

Vicky was impressed with the amount of detail the script has as well as the amount of equality of the dialogue between the presentersThe dialogue according to Vicky was exactly the right amount, however could be made more informal. This is mainly because the show needed to look more fun and uplifting as this is the main point especially for a BBC News show. To make the show more informal we will need to add some yorkshire dialect, and slang to make it more relatable by the younger generation and the local people too. This will also help to make it look more like the presenters are in a conversation rather than reading it off the script. We also need to remove the talking about the technology and replace it with more fun genre such as games and events. 

When Vicky told us her feedback on our script, we found out the majority of her comments were of a positive atmosphere rather than negative. This also came along with improvements we as a group could make. The improvements we were given were both constructive and helpful to the final script. 

However we found out that the balance for the dialogue we used for both presenters is equally split and is thorough enough in the detail that is used. This was mainly because Vicky also told us that she thought the information we used was both relevant and appropriate for the Television show it would have been aired upon.

One downside that Vicky spotted within our script was that  it could have been more "fun" this is because it seemed quite formal however does suit the style of the show. To improve the show and make it more fun we should improve the dialogue  by adding more regional dialect so that the local people can relate. As well as including local events to do with gaming and of the indie genre that the viewers would be interested in. 

Overall the improving of the script is going to be more thoroughly researched and will include more information on the indie genre of the games as well as games companies Sumo and Rockstar, We will also change the dialogue to suit the audience.